Sorry for the bump but really wanted to thank everyone - this forum's comments are all the more valuable to me when there are some things that work well and some things that work less well... So this one is going back to WIP (after the Summer competition!) and the challenge will be to lose some of the self-indulgent or mis-judged bits without making the good bits less effective.
I am hoping that the result will be a huge step forward; and also that some will take time to come back to it and see where it has travelled...
So I won't go into every specific comment (though PaulAds, drums, really?!) but want you to know I am enthused to take all the input and move things forward.
Thanks all!