HI Jackdaw, what were you doing on my roof this morning? This is an excellent write, some clever wordplay, and needs few if any alterations to the original post. Methinks you can tinker too much, and before you know it, something found is lost. One line was a little awkward, i won't say which, i'm sure you know yourself, but it's hard to find fault. Sorry for your recent loss, and i'm sure i'm not alone, no strangers here, only friends.
Great stuff
Vintage54