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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: ImRUSSEL on May 13, 2018, 10:58:59 PM
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Hey guys!
I need help writing this song, or atleast some feedback.
First a brief story about it.
A period in my life i smoked weed alot, which my family was against. It ended up in me pushing my family far away and I was kinda lost. I had noone to talk to, noone to be with.
Verse 1
All this time
I've been walking alone
Never looked back
Never went home
I kept shoutin' "where are ya, mom?"
She was nowhere to find
I looked everywhere, anywhere but nowhere to find.
Bridge???
I kept walking
My world started to crumble
I just kept talking
Noone to talk to
Noone
But you
You didn't answer me
That's when I knew
I was alone
Verse 2
Alone in my own world
Didn't say a single word
Time passed by
I was way too high to realize
The only thing i said was
I love you, goodbye
As I walked
The wind blew my face
I just thought
This was my fate
To be alone
To have no home
I came home home
All she said was
"I love you, welcome".
Thanks for reading..
Peace out,
imRUSSEL