Reflections (By Alyssa Womack)

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CorkingCrackBand

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« on: June 06, 2023, 01:36:54 AM »
A collaboration with the wonderful Alyssa Womack (QuoththeLlama over on the Muse forum). She wrote the most beautiful song about grief in the wake of her mothers death and very kindly allowed me to 'flesh it out' with her assistance. Alyssa is on vocals and acoustic guitar and wrote the song and lyrics - I arranged it and played everything else.





Reflections



I've been feeling like the mums you hung

On our old front porch

Like my roots dried out, and I'll grow no more

And I will never be quite like I was before

With all my sun dried petals drifting to the floor



Oh, I...

I have never looked so much like you

And looking in the mirror

Has never been so hard to do



I see you in my eyes, in my nose, in my smile

I see you and it steals my breath for a while

Well you can haunt every freckle

On this second-hand face

But what I've lost, reflections can't replace



I've been losing time and sleep

Thinking about your soul

How you won't come back, and you won't get old

Yeah, when you died something in me froze

But the birds still sing, and the grass still grows



Oh, I...

I have never felt a cut so deep

But I look in the mirror

And it's almost like you're here with me



I see you in my eyes, in my nose, in my smile

I see you and it steals my breath for a while

Well, you can haunt every freckle

On this second-hand face

But what I've lost, reflections can't replace



Now all we could have had is torn asunder

And I am here alone, afraid, and left to wonder

As my racing heartbeats crash like thunder

 And it drags me under

 And it drags me under



I see you in my eyes, in my nose, in my smile

I see you and it steals my breath for a while

Well, you can haunt every freckle

On this second-hand face

But what I've lost, reflections can't replace



I see you in my eyes, in my nose, in my smile

I see you and it steals my breath for a while

Well, you can haunt every freckle

On this second-hand face

But what I've lost, reflections can't replace

adamfarr

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« Reply #1 on: June 06, 2023, 09:55:37 AM »
What a stunning song. Obviously Alyssa is a great writer and performer (I went to that forum once but got overwhelmed by the sheer volume of activity) and she has such an original and personal take on this which I think will transmit to others.

The "second hand face" line made me stop in my tracks (a la "You left me here to remind me of you").

On the arrangement another amazing job I think - there was a risk of cheese here with the strings and appearance by Slash, but I think you avoided it or going overboard. It all seemed to serve the song well and didn't get in the way of Alyssa's performance.

Two questions - I didn't know what "mums" are in the first line: maybe that's more of a US thing - the image is really a great one but I was confused until l looked it up. And the ending seemed to cut off unnaturally - I think a moment for reflection and tailing reverb could be a better choice.

All good wishes to Alyssa; but also congratulations on what you both have created here.

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« Reply #2 on: June 06, 2023, 05:55:31 PM »
hola chicos @CorkingCrackBand  Alyssa

It is a magnificent song, it has a beauty in its sadness that reaches the heart!! ;iu good work, I have been very moved.
I did not know that to live we had to die so many times
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« Reply #3 on: June 06, 2023, 11:48:41 PM »
@CorkingCrackBand  Wow, very powerful lyrics I agree with Adam on the "second hand face" line, that is an absolute stunner! You also did a fine job adding the layers of instrumentation to give the song extra body and depth.

Excellent, Kevin




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« Reply #4 on: June 07, 2023, 08:12:27 AM »
@CorkingCrackBand An excellent song and your arrangement compliments her vocal and acoustic guitar.

What are the plans for this song? Is it heading for an official release?

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« Reply #5 on: June 08, 2023, 05:47:19 PM »
Hi @adamfarr

  On mums - they're a shortened term for chrysanthemums.  :)

 On the ending - I decided against the long hold, deciding a snipped end like the end of a life and it's sudden change was thematically suited. Horses for courses I suspect. On the guitar, there were points where it wasn't there at all and others where it was more 'guitar hero-esque' but I decided that a more pained guitar sitting lower in the mix than one might put a solo was a good compromise - so the guitar is part of the instrumental, not leading it. This wasn't a song for showboating - I'm glad you feel I navigated that delicate line.

Hi @kevysc and @moraamarolaloba

Thanks for your kind words. I was wholeheartedly surprised Alyssa chose me for the job so it was a pleasure working to bring the song to a point where we were both happy.

Hi @Nick Ryder

  Nah bud. At least not with any allusions of success. I think Alyssa has put it out via distrokid but I think we're both happy with being proud of it as our reward.  :)

Thanks for listening and commenting.

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