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Title: Spoils
Post by: Fellswell on April 02, 2018, 11:46:06 AM

Spoils

Don't make this complicated
We know the way it goes
Out of control like clockwork
Broken row by row
Stand tall my domino
And fall in line
It's about time
The wind and wind
Will find you balanced
On a pile of bones
Wherever you are thrown
You will land and call it home
Stand tall my domino
I'll fall at your feet
And I'll bring you down with me
To the tiles
Down the aisle
When the wave swallows
We will follow

Don't watch the stopped clock
Don't watch the dice drop
It won't change the outcome
It was always done
Since the spinning has begun
And you were winning all along
You've already won

Don't make this complicated
We know the way it goes
When every card's a joker
Your hand will always show
How you hold it to your throat
Like the turn will be tarot
But when every card's a joker
You will never lose alone

Title: Re: Spoils
Post by: adamfarr on April 05, 2018, 11:06:34 AM

There's some really good stuff here - the games images in particular. I really like the line "stand tall my domino". Not sure how you see the structure (verse/chorus etc.) though of course a traditional structure while normally expected is not necessary.

Title: Re: Spoils
Post by: Fellswell on April 06, 2018, 04:27:46 AM

Thanks! I post on another board where others are free to do whatever they'd like with the lyrics and a very talented musician did a version.

https://soundcloud.com/user-968376265/spoils-ghostwrite (https://soundcloud.com/user-968376265/spoils-ghostwrite)

I leave the song without structure so that the musician can fit it to their version.

Title: Re: Spoils
Post by: rightly on April 07, 2018, 11:07:10 AM

Quote from: Fellswell on April 06, 2018, 04:27:46 AM

Thanks! I post on another board where others are free to do whatever they'd like with the lyrics and a very talented musician did a version.

https://soundcloud.com/user-968376265/spoils-ghostwrite (https://soundcloud.com/user-968376265/spoils-ghostwrite)

I leave the song without structure so that the musician can fit it to their version.

Yes, some nice, interesting images here
I'll agree with Adam here, "stand tall my domino."

There's some thread to the whole thing too, thoughtful and useful for writers to get their little push into new directions.

I'm glad I found this post and would like to see more of your work.
I always need time to get things together and would appreciate seeing you about these parts more often. 

Thanks.