Hi all - vacation time so not much activity from me but at least some time to reflect - and write a song about (imagined) infidelity (as you do). This one should be a kind of 80s The Jam style rocker.
I was thinking that V1 is a bit cryptic (to me it was totally obvious he was on a train home but perhaps not to all!) and the Shower Gateway is maybe a bit trite but I liked it...
Anyhow, specific and constructive suggestions always welcome!
Dirt of London
V1:
Clammy hands holding a home-bound can
Sticky rings on the carriage shelf
The past reflects in the cold scratched glass
Instructions try to tell you how to save yourself
PRE1:
Tacky footprints on vibrating floors
Get off past the language round the sliding doors
CH
Lingering too long inside the shower gateway
Like water's going to cure the dirt of London
The strains of shame make stains that don't fade
You forgot yourself for something that can never be
forgotten
V2:
Last night's conference forgot the talk
Texts exchanged in expectation
Neon lights shone on polished shoes
Drawn into the elevator of temptation
PRE2:
Messy situations in the sterile room
Like helpless air attracted to a perfumed moon
Fleeting turn-on of an open goal
Sense went out the window with your self-control
CH
BREAK
V3:
Homecoming kisses, gifts, and looks away
Trusting son, too young to know desire
The girls still think you're superman
Too innocent to know what failure feels like
PRE3:
Another Oscar for the wife
Pretending she's not looking for the exit sign
CH
FINAL CH
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