[Wolfini]

This put me right in a seventies mood. Would be perfect for campfire singing and playing. Perhaps for a wedding? (Or maybe not...  ).

Very nice, Bye Wolfi

[digger72]

Hi Geoff,

Very nice song.
The guitar sounds lovely.
The vocal is very soothing.
Nice use of effects on the vocal

Fits the brief well.

Digger

[CaliaMoko]

Hmmm, I thought I already did this one. Apparently not. So,

The melody fits the lyric really well, I think. I did wonder about the phrase "total surprise" occurring twice so close together. Maybe you were trying to use the repetition to provide some emphasis, but it didn't work for me.

I hope the protagonist of the song is just really depressed at the recent breakup and will get to a point where he realizes he still has value, too. I'd like to see some hint of that, actually, before the end of the song, but that's really just a personal preference and not relevant to your vision for the piece.

The melody is pretty and, as I mentioned, fits the lyric. It's pleasant and invites the listener to hum or sing along, which is nice.

Good luck with the competition.
Vicki

[pompeyjazz]

Lovely song Shiny. Great Lennonesque vocals and a sad melody. Love the simple Bye Bye Bye, I love you chorus.

Great stuff

John

[Jambrains]

Very nice one, esp. enjoyed the vocals. There are a few places where one can tell you were a bit short on time but they are not very noticable or disturbing (but I bet those small glitches poke you in the ear , sure would for me).
Production could probably be somewhat improved to remove some "dullness" and get some "sparkle" in the,
the guitar could probably be a bit fuller as well, but those things are minor, icing on the cake things,
Good song, good performance, well... good everything.
Btw, I agree with pompy, there are definitely shades of Lennon/Beatles in there (in a good way)

[adamfarr]

Hi Shiny - loved this - I think everything works so well together. The resigned/forlorn lyric and delivery are right up my street and the melody and progressions really poignant.