You Earned It

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« on: March 02, 2011, 09:37:44 PM »
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You Earned it

Do you think that the beauty in you is dead
Or do you think people only see it in your bed
your stuck in the middle of cosmetic paradise
what you gonna do with a body like that
when you don't even know if its still yours
for the rest of your artificial life.

You're drinkin your poison and tellin your tellin your lies
about what happened between you and the girl the last night
why do you have to resort to make believe
you can't trick the mouth to taste what the eyes can't see
can you feel the tension across the courtyard
when you look straight at her and she looked straight back

It's far too damn crowded in your house
sometimes you just drift above the crowd
they don't even remember who you are
just your aura and what you did for them
you stumble across god in a jack daniels bottle
and ask for a little hope
He says child look at what you have done
put down those silly pills and run

There's a sacred wall in the guys toilets
where they carve your name
don't dare cry about it
don't scream about
you supplied their message
tears for guilt and tears for self pity
Just aren't the same.
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« Reply #1 on: March 07, 2011, 07:01:59 AM »
Hi TheClassAbsentee

it's good rhyming and it sends out a visual message aswell, i like the line 'you stumble across god in a jack daniels bottle'  it just makes me laugh and smile and wish i had writin it.

good work, keep it up