[Homeless Recluse]

I'll probably keep this one as an acoustic, once I get around to finish it. I wrote it earlier this year but haven't been able to finish it cause of an arm injury.
Re-worked the lyrics though.

                 'Holes in my Boots'

                 My woman has ran off with an another man
                 Cause of my bad moods
                 And now the bank, say they're gonna take away my home
                
                 I got holes in my boots
                 And flies in my booze

                 I say, lord wont you help me I
                 I'm here on my knees for you
                 I say lord wont you help
                 Tell me what I need to do
  
                 Lord won't you help
                 I got holes in my boots
                 And flies in my booze

re-written lyric to give a better story;

                
                  My boss called me up
                  And said I'm gonna have to let you go
                  And now the man at the bank, says;
                  We're gonna have to take away your home

                  So now I got holes in my boots
                  And flies in my booze
 
                  My woman, has ran off with another man
                  Cause of my bad moods
                  She said 'I don't want you no more
                  So pack your stuff boy, and hit the road

                  Now I got holes in my boots
                  And flies in booze
                  Yeah I got holes in my boots
                  And flies in my booze

 break down/solo        
                   What's a guy to do
                   Lord wont you help me
                   lord won't you help me
                   I got flies in my boot's


                   I say, lord wont you help me I
                   I'm here on my knees for you
                   I say lord wont you help
                   Tell me what I need to do

                   Now I got holes in my boots
                   And flies in booze
                   Yeah I got holes in my boots
                   And flies in my booze


Suggestions and criticisms welcome please
Cheers

Pete

It was transferred from mini disc using the UCA222 and it doesn't didn't have that much reverb on it. No idea where it came from!

 



https://soundcloud.com/homelessrecluse/holes-in-my-boots

[hardtwistmusic]

Good lyrics, and I liked the accompaniment.  Very bluesy sounding to me.  I like that sound.

[Jamie]

Great singing, works well on this bluesy guitar song. Nice playing too. Easy to listen to. I agree that it would be good to finish it as an acoustic song.
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie

[Stylus]

Hi HR
          Very nice  bluesy guitar & makes a change from the 12 bar usually associated to blues..very John lee hooker...just him & a guitar I like the bit where you get rythmic on the guitar body Ace!:)
               work the vocals a bit more & you've got a great toon......

  oh  I wasnt too sure about  flies in my booze line  but will have more listens   Thanks 4 sharing

[Homeless Recluse]

Thanks for listening guys.

John lee hooker!?

Yeah, It's far from finished lyrically I think. There's a few niggly bit's that ill either rewrite or rework in the actual phrasing when singing.

Funny you mention that line Stylus, I wasn't sure about it either, booze and boots sound too similar I think. When I was recording it I kept 'singing flies in my boots' LOL

Thanks again

[Stylus]

John lee  meaning  like the early days when a bluesman...sat on a porch  & not in a porche 
Raw blues...Pre stones & John mayhall etc.

Ha,ha,ha  Flies in ma bootz!   I kept hearin...I got flies in ma boob'z 


Wat about? Lord help me...I got holes in my boots  & tears   in ma doggone  suit?

       OR      Holes in ma boots...........I aint got nothing to lose..........


                                                I likez      Stylus

[benjo]

 hey HR

 I love this, yes it needs work lyrically
 but you got a real chance here to do something special with this
 your vocal is fantastic here and really catches the blues feel
 and that guitar playing was off the scale for me

 I've wrote a couple of blues lyrics and the way you performed this
 is the way I see mine being done, lovely job

 your lyrics,                    I GOT HOLES IN MY BOOTS
                                     AND FLIES IN MY BOOZE

 for me don't work at all

                                      I GOT HOLES IN MY BOOTS
                                      AND FLIES AROUND MY BEER 

 the reason for flies around your beer is a metaphor for what's going on in your life
 instead of them being in the beer / booze,  it's like the flies are all the people
 wanting something out of you
 I loved this song,  so please take anything you read here as a complement
 and I really do like where it's going
 
 well done on this and these are only ideas to try and help
 hope it has in some way

                                         tony.




             

[diademgrove]

Most of this is excellent. Love the vocal for most of the song, plus the guitar playing. The only thing I didn't think worked was the singing over the break down and solo. It didn't sound as convincing as the first part of the song. I'd maybe try singing just Lord and let the guitar line finish the rest of the melody. Maybe with the vocal a little softer to indicate despair.

I'm not keen on the additional words. I know they provide more explanation, but sometimes less is a lot more.

I liked the word booze. Allows the listener to pick whichever drink they think is appropriate, its also rhymes with blues.

Feel free to ignore me if you wish,

diadem

[tina m]

oh yes i like this ....great acoustic blues sound ....your voice is fabulous for this & the guitar sounds great aswell .....the trouble with the blues is the story is always the same & theres not much of a variation to make it  interestingly diffrent
i think it needs a much stronger lyric in the chorus to capture the listener ...like a catch phrase something clever
i think it would be improved if you sang for example 'ive got another man in my boots
& im sleeping with the booze' but thats not what i mean by catchphrase clever
but i do like evrything else about it

[Stylus]

     or   I'm sleeping with another man & I got booze in ma bootz!      

[tina m]

or..... im sleeping with another mans boots & i get bruises when i snoozes

[Homeless Recluse]

Hey guys, thank you all so much.

Wow, to hear the compliments about my voice is really surprising. I don't really think of myself as a singer!
Tony I actually wrote it with that line first, 'Flies round my beer' but felt that it wasn't strong enough. It feels better to me, the word booze, and how it rhymes with shoes for some reason, but, I'm not a 100% on it either; Although now I've got boobs in my head....thanks stylus!
I've took on board your comments about the breakdown and made a note to make the vocal more minimalist there, see if I like that better, that's something I deffo wouldn't have thought of so thanks a lot for that.
Tinam, would it help if I told you the story was true! Which it is
You're right of course though, it has all been done before in the blues which makes it doubly hard to come up with something good and original...How can I compete with 'I wanna play with your poodle' though!

Thanks again guys I really am grateful for the suggestions and will try them all out....well apart from the last 2!

[RyanHalsey]

The moment the guitar kicked i was feeling that, really dirty and grooving!

Big fan of your vocal as well, really suits your style of guitar playing.

I think what people have suggested above is great advice and there is nothing i can add to that, just wanted to say how much i liked that guitar!

Ryan

[Homeless Recluse]

Cheers Ryan, thanks for taking the time to listen. Your comments are really appreciated bud.

[Alan Starkie]

I like this. Classic acoustic blues. I want more slide work though!!!

When it first kicked off I had this vision of Joe Cocker singing 'I heard it through the grapevine'!

Bit of Black Keys too. All good btw.

I have a slight niggle with vocals I hear on forum songs sometimes - too relaxed and not clearly sung/sang/singded?

Without a lyric sheet there's some words that would have been lost I feel. Mostly consonants at the ends of words. Even the bluesiest/roughest/laziest lyric has to be sung clearly into the mic.

I'm sounding mega critical and yours isn't actually that bad. Just a few words/lines here and there.

Your voice is great for the music you produce. Perfect match.

Nice one Pete.

Alan.