OK, I think I'm just about done and about to record this. Any additional input or suggestions before I go ahead?
A draft of the first verse and chorus is available here if someone is interested:
https://soundcloud.com/jambrains/cries-of-angels-draft/s-tKyjrCRIES OF ANGELS
V1
Intoxicated strangers
in a bar I do not know
the kind of place where fallen angels
come to hit their all time low
There's a sign behind the counter
it says "leave no stone unturned"
made me smile for just one moment
'cause I did just that and crashed and burned
CHORUS
But now I see
the cries of all my angels
were always drowned by demons whispering
then one by one
my angels all fell silent
until their cries were nigh to nothing
V2
A drunk, young couple in the corner
none of them more than a teen
I shrugged my shoulders, searched for quarters
and headed off to a slot machine
I put my hand upon the lever
said "let it rock and let it roll"
and just as all the wheels stopped turning
the scotch began to take it toll
CHORUS
BREAK
I stumbled through the hallway
tripped and crashed onto the floor
gazed up on a naked light bulb
and I could hear my demons roar
CHORUS