[TheRogueBlade]

Yes I can Relate




When your world comes crashing down, what can you do?
When your whole life is ripped apart, what can you do?
You see her carrying on, not thinking about you anymore.
You can't believe that this is the girl you adored
You want to cry
Don't give up you've got to try
You feel like You're going to break
But just hold on, this is her mistake
I will not beg I'll only pray
That you can find another way


Yes I can relate
To all the pain she put you through
Yes I can relate
To all the times that she played you
Yes I can relate
I've been there in your shoes before
Yes I can relate
But I'm not wearing them anymore


It's okay to feel like this
You miss her touch, you miss her kiss
You hold out hope that she'll come back
But all those hopes begin to crack
You to try to shout and try to scream
And you just want it all to be a bad dream
The time is now to restart your life
Get past all this pain and all this strife


Yes I can relate
To all the pain she put you through
Yes I can relate
To all the times that she played you
Yes I can relate
I've been there in your shoes before
Yes I can relate
But I'm not wearing them anymore


A girl she broke my heart once too
I pass my strength upon to you
I'm not gonna lie, it will be hard, it will be tough
The pain she caused, it won't be enough
You'll try to call, you'll try to see her
Even though you know that she don't care
Your moving on, it's gonna take a long time
Just to try to be happy, cause it ain't no crime


Yes I can relate
To all the pain she put you through
Yes I can relate
To all the times that she played you
Yes I can relate
I've been there in your shoes before
Yes I can relate
But I'm not wearing them anymore

[Sing4me88]

There's something in this. I like the chorus and the repetition of the hook line'Yes I can relate'. The last two lines of the chorus are really strong and it's very clever to say that you were once in those shoes but aren't wearing them anymore.

My only concern is with the opening verse. It seems all over the place in terms of structure and it's hard to pick up a flow and it seems out of sync with the rest of the song. You'll have a melody etc in your head so you'll know how it works and flows but as a read it was kinda hard to get that.

A good write all the same

[benjo]

hi the rogueblade,

some clever lines here, i do agree with above so maybe just a little tidy up
but it's there well done tony...

[Jess]

I took me a couple reads to grasp the perspective this is written in and what it's about but when I did it seemed like a good piece- lots of potential too. I quite like how the first verse is different- I don't know if you did it on purpose but to me it felt like an introduction spokeny sung type thing (I'm probably taking it the complete wrong way but that was just my interpretation.) Agree the chorus is very strong and those last three lines of it are fab.

[GTB]

Hi Rogueblade, the above posts sum this up for me too. I would say the perspective is a bit obscure in the first first too.  Even though it says "your" world it reads as "my" world...  How about something like "Your world has come crashing down, what will you do?" etc? but then you may be able to get the right perspective over anyway depending on how you sing it :-)

Chorus is vey strong.  With the right music this song could kick ass!
GTB

[Kevin j]

not much more i can say that hasnt been said cept that i liked the lyrics,
and i'm probably wrong but it might be a bit long, it really depends what kind
of melody you have for it though, but thats nothing really
nice work

[BooBoo]

The first verse really suits my current situation!! Because in a sense I can relate to the song I liked it even more (in my case you would change 'girl' to 'boy')! Loved this though, I thought the whole song was quite strong and interesting. The way it changes perspective is unique and I like that about it!

[Lyrycalsoulz]

The last line of the chorus kind of threw me a little bit as... i dont know... just felt as though it was out of place a bit

Aside from that ... fantastic I read it all and Im glad I did and again the truth element to this song always will grip my attention