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Title: 'Pocketful Of Snow'
Post by: Alan Starkie on December 06, 2014, 02:56:55 PM
****EDIT - SONG NOW FINISHED******

Unmixed and temporary bass track.

I may add sleigh bells as NeilC suggested it sounds (unintentionally) Christmassy!?

What do you reckon?

Cheers.

https://soundcloud.com/alanstarkie/pocket-full-of-snow-v2/s-tRhRb

'Pocketful Of Snow'

Don't want to die for you
I want to spend my life with you

I can't help that I'm not that good at love
But baby believe me, believe me, I'm trying

I took a chance on a cold white morning
You gave your love and I hid it away in my winter coat
We were magnified in the cold light
But the only thing you left me
Was a pocketful of snow

I don't hear sometimes
But I'm still listening

It feels like I'm not really here
But I'm still reaching, out for, something

I took a chance on a cold white morning
You gave your love and I hid it away in my winter coat
We were magnified in the cold light
But the only thing you left me
Was a pocketful of snow

I took a chance on a cold white morning
You gave your love and I hid it away in my winter coat
We were magnified in the cold light
But the only thing you left me
Was a pocketful of snow
Title: Re: 'Pocketful Of Snow'
Post by: Jambrains on December 08, 2014, 08:33:48 PM
Unimixed track? Temporary bass? Man, even your lowest standard is soooo high....
Everything sounds just great to me esp. the acoustics and the vocals. The guitars in the chorus sound so good, I think you can bring them up a bit more but that would more or less be my only complaint.
Solid song even if it's not excactly breath taking. Way to good to be disguised as a Christmas song though, don't do it. Please...
Btw, I would loose that shaker as well, but just a matter of personal taste of course.

/Johan
Title: Re: 'Pocketful Of Snow'
Post by: Cookieraider007 on December 10, 2014, 04:02:18 PM
Wow Alan! I'm loving the instrumental on this song! I was really getting into the beat! Like Johan said, please don't make this into a Christmas song. It's way too good for that! I love the melody too and it works with your voice. A few tweaks here and there in the blending and this song could really be something! Good job!
Title: Re: 'Pocketful Of Snow'
Post by: GTB on December 15, 2014, 11:46:29 PM
Awesome Song, this is the real deal! Xmas or no xmas 😀