I don't often poke my head into the lyric section and hope no-one minds indulging me this time.
Once upon a time there was a lyric which I wrote some music to which was, unbeknownst to me, being worked on by someone else too. I was then 'trumped' to use an expression pertinent to the original lyric (by Arkwright) by Tokenangmoh with his award-winning song 'Love To Hate Me'.
This was something of a shock at the time but I am pretty pleased that I was inspired to write some music which I'm working on at the moment, and quite liking so far.
So, I needed to pen a new lyric. Here it is.
We conjured up
That magic night
The stars seemed right
For casual romance or frivolous?
We filled the cup
In our delight
And chanced a bite
Of sweet circumstance
Tricked by your charms
My fate
Trickled through
My hands
I loaned out my heart
But only for a day
Right back at the start
I wanted it that way
Your whispered words
Softly creep
While I'm asleep
You subjugate my soul or penetrate or what?
Like clay in your hands
I fold
Now I'm yours
To mould
I loaned out my heart
Not for you to keep
Shallow at the start
Now I'm in too deep
I didn't see
How could I tell
That I was falling
Under your spell
I slipped and fell
Under your spell
I slipped and fell
Under your spell
etc etc
Hi Cramer1930
The situation you found yourself in regarding writing music for lyrics could happen for other members.
What do you think about the subject being permitted to be discussed openly so that perhaps a solution could be arrived at to prevent the circumstances cropping up.
I am sorry that it happened to you and it is only by you saying about your experience that I wonder if I have been in a similar situation. (I wrote the music and came up with a finished song quite some time ago, which received pleasing comments from the lyric writer but he has disappeared now so I don't know where I stand regarding the song.
I am worried that it might happen again and so, if there are some 'rules' on how the collaboration should be handled, problems needn't arise. Do you agree with this and the idea for a discussion without the fear of causing offence and making sure that the situation would be clear from the start?
Regarding your good new lyrics, I found the rhyming scheme fascinating as you have rhymed the 2 inner lines in some verses as opposed to the more conventional way of alternate lines. It would be interesting to hear the music.
I personally like how you have built the song to the last few lines.
I like the word 'casual' rather than 'frivolous' but it is just my thoughts which don't have to be taken notice of
Marrianna