Not really sure if this "goes anywhere" meaningful or not. It's too new for me to evaluate. I'm hoping that someone here can short cut the process for me and give me some advance warning about parts (or the whole) that doesn't work.
It will take me weeks to get objective enough to evaluate it myself.
And if anyone likes it, feel free to check in with me about adding music. I do have melodic ideas for the chorus, but not the verses. To be more accurate. . . my current melodic understanding of the verses would be plagiaristic. . . so a fresh look at them would help a lot.
Telling Me True
VERSE:
Were you telling me true when you said “I love you”
in Wyoming?
With your heart on the shelf, did you lie to yourself
About me?
You know what to do. You’re the one who
should be telling me true.
CHORUS
Listen! – Can you hear?
I’ve been trying to say I can’t stay through this terrible fear.
Hey, I’m begging you. – Right now, I’m begging you.
Just this once my darling could you tell me true?
VERSE:
You’ve been wanting to go, – though you hope I don’t know
that you’re leaving.
You were lying to me – Tryin to cut yourself free
from my love.
You should try something new.
Start telling me true. How you feel.
CHORUS:
I Got questions in my mind.
If I stay with you… I’ll never know what I’ll find.
Hey, I’m begging you. Now Babe, I’m begging you.
Just one time my darling could you tell me true?
Needs a musical bridge here. VERSE:
You don’t want to stay but you’re frightened to stray
to the deep end.
I’m enabling you to hide what you do
from the world.
Gaining freedom from you is all I can do, (still not totally right)
And that’s telling it true.
CHORUS:
Heaven! – Isn’t here.
It is light years away from everything I hold dear?
Girl, it’s too late now. – Girl, it’s too late now.
Too late now my darling to tell me true.