Hi AnnaLina!
I like your lyric. The way the 'just in case' finds it's way into what might be a pre-chorus. My advice is to work more with how the lines follow each other. Some rhymes tend to dominate lyrics which overshadows the rest of the words. I say, let the music be the continuous part and let the words flow more freely. This is not meant as criticism, you have a good theme for your lyric.
Ps.When I read just a lyric I often make up a song/melody in my head to go along with it. I've made some sketches that I'd gladly share if you'd like some input on chords/melody. Ds.
Best regards,
Martin
What he said. I had the same "feeling" about this lyric. Needs some repetition. And "just in case" is a great line which makes a great title. It needs to be featured more. I liked the level of "completeness" of your story. It's easy to provide too much or too little "story" to explain the lyric. I think you nailed it on this one. Not too much, and not too little. You tell a reasonably complete story, but leave us (listeners/readers) a few holes to fill in ourselves.
It sang well, but not easily. That's actually a good thing. Lyrics that are "easy to sing" have a tendency to elicit somewhat generic music. This lyric demands creativity in finding a viable melody.
Overall, I really liked this. With the right music, it will make an excellent song i.m.o.