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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Polky09 on September 18, 2016, 02:40:28 AM
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Together
All I ask is when?
I don’t know how; I don’t know who,
If only I new the answer’s as to why.
The only thing I seem to know
is we’ll search the sky
for Shooting stars and satellites.
When we see that tale of light
Together we can make a wish.
So hold on tight, close your eyes
where about to travel the speed of light
Together we will jump down that hole.
Turn our dreams upside down
escape the land of never,
find our land of wonder.
What happened to when?
Did you find out how; did you find who,
even the answer’s as to why.
The only thing I seem to know
Together we can climb
find our castle in the clouds.
The sleeping giant we can wake.
Our wish made upon the tale of a star
nothing will break.
Hold on tight, Close your eyes
where about to travel the speed of light
Together we will jump down that hole.
Turn our dreams upside down
escape the land of never,
find our land of wonder.
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Really like this, nicely written and good imagery.
Think it could do with a bridge or another chorus though.
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Great lyrics. I hear them sang over a 1960s sound scape, Jefferson Airplane meets the Beatles with a hint of Jeff Beck.
Have you any music in mind?
Very impressed,
Keith
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Thank you for your very kind words,
I havnt yet put music to it, it will deff keep your idea
In mind when I do,
I am also trying to write a bridge/ conecting verse to tie it together :)
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I added something, what do you think?
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Hi,
i love it,it's quite cryptic and different which really
appeals to me,it's a really clever lyric,
regards,Tom.