Hello,
Writing as I listen.
Steady intro keeping the pace, and driving. Perhaps, if you could add percussion at 0:19 and then not have harmonies right at the beginning, it's a bit much. The harmonies clash. The lyrics are positive and I like that. I feel like you don't need more than one vocal track here. It makes it muddy. I like the melody in general. Maybe a bit of variation can be beneficial. Nevermind. 2:54 really brings it together
However a more driving 8th not strum pattern would pick that section up a bit more, then when it goes to the chorus, go back to the old strum pattern, but heavier.
Good work, good vibes. Keep practicing, and making sure you can keep longer notes on key. I really like what you have started here. Hope to hear more soon.
Nate
