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Song Grammar (a guide to lyric writing)

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igg

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« on: November 10, 2015, 05:56:36 PM »
Here's a little lyric from earlier in the year......  I hope it brings a smile......

SONG GRAMMAR ©I.Wolosenko

I keep my words up on a shelf, they're grumbling all the time
I push and prod and plead with them, to try to make 'em rhyme
Sometimes.. I like to stretch them
Sometimes ..I'll cut 'em short
Or line them up against the wall to see how they'll comport

An article's obsequious , the way it tries to fit
The hanging gerunds, always pushing, never give a sh*t
Of prepositions, I can't speak
I don't know where they're from
While adverbs wait so patiently for all their verbs to come

CHORUS:
When every song is finished and all the words agree
I love to hear them sing together, in their prosody
The music really moves them, Oh... how they howl and weep
To comfort them, I'll give 'em all... a kiss before they sleep


Most nouns are never active, they all just sit around
Some predatory adjective will often pin one down
My nervous pronouns wonder
To whom they might belong
Without their strict agreement, we might never write our song

To cruelly split infinitives, is something I won't do
And verbs are quite intransitive, when left alone to stew
But sometimes in my ghastly glee
I'm likely to disturb
An unsuspecting little noun .... by making it a verb

CHORUS:
When every song is finished and all the words agree
I love to hear them sing together, in their prosody
The music really moves them, Oh... how they howl and weep
To comfort them, I'll give 'em all... a kiss before they sleep


I'm bludgeoning my verses and breaking off the rhymes
And, I'll be changing tenses now, manipulating time
I'm squeezing my contractions
They're feeling nice and tight
Sometimes, you've got to really push, to make 'em come out right

CHORUS:

tomcrocus

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« Reply #1 on: November 10, 2015, 06:18:54 PM »
You've certainly got a way with words igg,this is just great,
it's clever it's fun it's bang on,it gets a ten outta ten from me,
                                                                                    Tom.

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« Reply #2 on: November 11, 2015, 12:49:01 PM »
a smile. Is what it bringed :)
heart of stone, feet of clay, knob of butter

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« Reply #3 on: November 13, 2015, 12:28:10 AM »

    igg,
     Did you write this, or did it come from someone else? If it came from you, here's my hand, now give me yours, and let me shake it. This may be fun, but it's also f**king awesome. Nothing more to say, lost for words, can't reach them on the shelf.

                          Just thanks
                             Vintage54

igg

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« Reply #4 on: November 13, 2015, 12:47:41 AM »
Hi Guys,

You are all too kind....  I just had to write down the rules, so I wouldn't forget them.....

Tom-  Thanks!!!  Words are better than pets....Nah, not really...I've got two standard poodles (Jasper and Sophie.. aka.. The Big Ninny and The Princess)) and they are the best!!!!

Paul - I think your gettin' the hang of it....But the correct term is brung.....

Vintage - Thanks....Don't they just feel like little critters sometimes?...You just got to go chase after 'em....

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« Reply #5 on: November 13, 2015, 07:47:14 AM »
Dude... THIS IS FREAKING GENIUS.   I kept not opening this because I thought it was just in the wrong section.  When I did open it, I was just blown away. 

I wish I had written this.  Not only did I not think of it, I don't think I could have come up with as inventive a lyric as you have done even if I had thought of it first. 

My hat is REALLY off to you.  One of my all time favorite lyrics from this site.  You should be proud of this one.  I can't say enough about it.  I'm almost as excited by it as if I had written it myself. 

Not much more to say.  But once again.. FREAKING GENIUS. 
www.reverbnation.com/hardtwistmusicsongwriter

Verlon Gates  -  60 plus years old.

igg

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« Reply #6 on: November 13, 2015, 04:35:13 PM »
Hi HTM,

Wow!!!   I'm glad it tickled you in all the right places....  Thanks for the glowing praise.... I'm at a loss for words.....!

igg

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« Reply #7 on: November 13, 2015, 05:09:24 PM »
Hi igg

Must admit, this made me feel stupid :)
I can see that a lot of talent (and education) went into this, and I should remember all these terms from way back in my school days, but I'm afraid I don't. So you may be limiting your audience to the posters above me (in more ways than one!  ;D).

Now I'm off to google comport, obsequious, gerunds, - ah why bother  ??? ??? ??!!

cheers
Paul

igg

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« Reply #8 on: November 17, 2015, 09:46:06 PM »
Paulski,

I don't believe that your your misspent youth has brought you to this sad admission....LOL   Now repeat after me, " The gerund is a non-finite verb form that can function as a noun in Latin and English grammar.".....  And none of that business about your homework and your dog......!

igg

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« Reply #9 on: November 18, 2015, 05:04:10 PM »
Well good mate. I feel like I'm back at school, learning all these words again.

Really good writing, really enjoyed it...

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« Reply #10 on: November 23, 2015, 07:32:56 PM »
Brilliantly constructed and cleverer than a clever thing in clever land...

It flows beautifully and rolls off a the tongue with ease.

But (yes there is a but) I'm not sure it makes a song. It makes the most wonderful piece of prose that would win first place at any poetry contest, I just can't imagine it set to music.

Of course I could be completely wrong as I'm known for my musical ineptness, so I look forward to being proven wrong. You clearly have an enviable talent.

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« Reply #11 on: November 25, 2015, 06:42:44 AM »
Igg,
Clever, very clever and informative too. Loved the last very in particular
 :)
Neil
songwriter of no repute..

igg

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« Reply #12 on: November 28, 2015, 08:13:07 PM »
Hi Guys,

Thanks for taking the time to read...

Oliver - I think if teaching grammar was a little more animated (with each little critter with his own personality)..it wouldn't have been such a drudge (might make a a fun little cartoon video)....but you have to admit.... that what the little buggers are called....participles, gerunds, infinitives are pretty cool...  Kind of like Aeolian, Mixolydian, Phrigian in that other great drudge...Music Theory...LOL

Arkwrite - Thanks!  I have some very cool music in mind for this one...Who could imagine "Modern Major-General" set to music just by reading it....

Neil - Thanks for praise....I'm glad you enjoyed it....!!!

igg

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« Reply #13 on: November 29, 2015, 10:43:47 AM »
Amazing! Are you an English professor? (I meant professor of English ). Loved the split infinitive 😀
Now, where's my dictionary...
GTB

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« Reply #14 on: December 06, 2015, 02:48:43 PM »
Hi,

Nope...no professor.  Just another language torturer......
igg