[fischermans]

Hello
Here is a song I wrote inspired in thought about the death of my father and the way to his end two years ago.
Again I  still have the melody to the song ready. Please write me your criticism to become more professional. You are all welcome.

To die is like loving  

Strophe 1: I told you my friend I have to die
I told you my friend that we can't fly
away in the dark away in the night
away from the darkness into the light
away to a place where we don't have to fight
I told you my friend so many things
I told you my friend you never win
too many broken hearts till now
too many lies no one knows why
too many streets to many cross roads
which bring you far away from home

Refrain:
Hope to see you soon again
Hope to be a better man
Hope to give my live a chance
Hope it is no hopeless sense
to start my flight again

Strophe 2: I told you my friend time never end
I told you my friend don't run for tribute
don't try to figure out what life's about
don't try to find a reason for what
it doesn't matter it doesn't not
I told you my friend we couldn't run away
I told you my friend our ticket is paid from someone else
we only have to take the train
whom brings us back to beginning again
we can not fly away
haven't a chance to take another way.

Instrumental bridge
Refrain:

Strophe 3: I told you my friend live never stops
because it always start new at the end
So don't be hopeless and fill your dreams right
life is not less then your heaviest fight
I want to tell you so much but now it's over
hear my last words my friend
darkness comes closer
to die is like loving it can't be wrong
to die is like searching for a brand new song
I told you my friend there is no end
life always goes on

Refrain:

Hope you like it.
Alexander

[Jess]

You can really see, when reading the lyrics, where your inspiration comes from, and I think the fact that they are personal makes any song one million times better- even if, in your case, it must've been a hard thing to write about.
I like the refrain (especially the last few lines) it's very simple, yet very beautiful and sums up the essence of the song.
For me, the song isn't recognisable from the title, maybe it's just me, but I can't see it in the lyrics and although I like it as a title, I think you should name it after one of the lines already in the song, like 'I told you my friend' for example.
Personally, for me, some of the rhyming is a tad basic- die, fly or light, fight, however maybe that's just me and my pet hate for cheesy rhymes
Anyway, I like this

[fischermans]

Hello Jess
Thanks for your comments.The title you can find in the 3 verse:
I want to tell you so much but now it's over
hear my last words my friend
darkness comes closer
to die is like loving it can't be wrong
to die is like searching for a brand new song
I told you my friend there is no end
life always goes on
Keep on your helpful work.
Alexander

[GTB]

Hi Alexander,  I like this song, it's obviously straight from the heart - the best one's are.  It's full of honest emotion and it reminds me a little (in a good way) of Dream Theatre's 'take away my pain'.  I will be interested if you post a recording of it because I think it's long enough to need some clever variations to keep the listener engaged (e.g. quiet, reflective sections, stops in the music, louder/quieter parts etc.). 
I do agree with Jess about some of the rhyming, but often that can be completely countered by the way it is sung.  I would have another look at:
* The word 'die' in the first line seems a little blunt, which would be great in a heavy metal song but maybe 'have to go' or 'have to leave' would say the same thing.  Using the word 'die' in the last few lines feels absolutely right though.
* The word 'knight' in line 3 - apologies if I'm missing a double meaning there - should it be 'night'?
* There appears to be a few grammatical quirks, like using 'to' where you need 'too' - easily sorted.

I suspect English may not be your first language, but either way, well done!  This is a cracking song and I can't wait to actually hear it.
best regards, Graham

[fischermans]

Hello Graham
Thanks for your review and your helpful comments.For your first point:
The word 'die' in the first line....  I have to think about that a few days.For the moment I think I will let it as it is.
Your second point: You are right.The word 'knight' in line 3 should be 'night'.I change it.
Your third point:grammatical quirks  You are again right.English is not my first language.I try to find all mistakes but help is also welcome.
Thanks again for your nice words.
Alexander