Hi Vintage.
I love your first two lines. What a perfect start to a story-song! (And they inspired me to write a lyric about sailing, which I've just posted.)
I like the rest of the piece too... The roots bit is nicely dealt with, and the "bed bug room" is great.
My only issue is I wanted a chorus. You're telling the whole span of this guy's life, and I wanted something briefer and more focused to contrast with that.
But the verses are strong, so I shouldn't complain.
By the way, I nominated you for September Lyrics of the Month - I don't know if you're aware... Do remember to vote!
Matt