I like this, but it does have a couple of litterary issues.
Firstly, the past tense of spin is spun. Span is the distance between two points. Eg: the span of a bridge.
Secondly, this lyric has inconsistencies of tense. Some is written in current tense and other parts in past tense. Some examples for you:
The whole first verse: current tense
The whole of second verse : past tense
Third verse : current tense
It would not be a biggie to just change the odd line here and there to make everything past tense, eg: I imagine..... Becomes I imagined.....
I imagine you on tip-toes, seeking a peep
but my boobs are embargoed so fall flat on your feet
This line could also command a little attention as it actually reads that it is you boobs that fell flat on his feet. I am certain that is not what was intended. Interesting lines that grab the readers attention and tell yiu story in a unique and refreshing approach. Still very wordy, but thats nit a problem per se' as it provides ample flesh fir a musisian to surgically trim it to fit almost any music.
I enjoyed it. The only real issues I had were those of grammar, its an interesting write.
Allan.