[victorvillero]

As usual, comments are accepted and highly appreciated..


Verse
Rise above
Rise above, my lovely, native land
Open your eyes
to the predicament that lies at hand
Obstruction--freedom's demise

Pre-Chorus
When will we learn
to extend our judgment and move against the flow
When will we prevail to save the people from the people of the people?

Chorus
Actions speak louder than words

Verse
The thrills of a nation
lies beneath recurring situations
Blunders and word contraptions
And then a-foolin' us with their silly incantations

Pre-Chorus
When will we learn
to extend our judgment and move against the flow
It's not as if we can't think for our own sake
to be blind to our own mistake

Chorus
Actions speak louder than words

Chorus
Actions speak louder than words


A hundred million words can't quite make it

[den]

I really think you should post a works in progress with the music to this, its a very deep lyric and you have obviously put a lot of thought and passion into this work, but it really is one of those lyrics that only come alive when you hear the music behind it. and I am sure you would have put as much passion into the music, I will look out for this.

[Flux Identity]

Hi Victor,

I like it this one a lot! Seems to revolve around matters I'm into as well." ...to save the people from the people of the people" is very memorable. I wonder what kind of genre you are going to wrap this one with.

Great work,

Lukasz

[Paulski]

Hi Victor

As someone that usually writes to a hook, "Untitled II" doesn't cut it for me
Joking aside, that's the shortest chorus I've ever seen but I think it could work. Maybe your title's there? And the pre chorus is usually shorter than the chorus! so you're breaking some rules (but that can work too !)

BTW - I love the ppl/ppl/ppl line - and the short chorus.
Looking 4ward to hearing this

Paul

[mickeytwonames]

Rise Above  - could be a good title