I'm a professional arranger/producer. Songwriting is a hobby but I love the art.
In general the bass frequencies are a little weak. At around 00;58, the comping element comes a little loud (later it becomes to feel like the previous stuff was quiet, and the levels pretty much makes sense), the monophonic melody element that follows could be more static in terms of panning, and wetter in terms of space. The next element that is more treble driven just fights with that melodic element.After that every new element is just fighting with each other.
Remember, a music listener can only follow 3 rhythmic/harmonic/melodic motives. Different things that accent each other count as 1, please remember this. Around 3:15 is really wonderful. I think all your ideas match with each other as pairs, but overall it's a little crowded.
Please don't take what I said as the ultimate thing, just process it and see what you would like to care about from everything I say. The vibe is really uplifting and this could go somewhere.
Keep up that great work.