Looking for constructive advice. This song is about the crutch drugs create and for some leads to the end.
Im trying to study the art of lyric writing so it may not be pretty
Broken Crutch
verse
when she wakes her rabbit is near
down the hole she slides, to find
takes her poison, numbs her mind
one foot, two, another day just get through
She puts her best dress on
chorus
and she cries inside
and she hides the lie
she still lives her life
filled with false pride
part of her has already died
but at the end
she must start again
verse
he opens his eyes distorted by pills
head high in clouds of confusion
no need to feel, he owns his delusion
one foot, two, one more day he'll be through
he puts his best shirt on
Chorus
and he cries inside
and he hides the lie
he still lives his life
filled with false pride
part of him has already died
but at the end
he must start again
verse
how many days to get through
to hide, to lie, to stay untrue
its embrace is near, it will not stall
the cold dark wind, locks their jaw
one foot, two, but this day they'll not get through
put your black clothes on
No pain to hide, no need to cry
for both of them has fully died.