I would appreciate any feedback. This one actually has some cohesive metaphors and I think the opening is strong along with the chorus. I know it's hard to judge without music but any comments are helpful. Thanks for reading.
Verse 1
Street Light
Illuminate the way
This road
Grows darker every day
Pre-Chorus
I'm not the man
I thought i'd be
I'm just a boy
Trapped in a suit of masculinity
Chorus
Feel the moon as it
Pulls the tide
Hide the pain as it
Starts to rise
Keep the waves on the
Inside
But I'm drowning
I'm drowning
Verse 2
Street Light
Illuminate the way
My eyes
Grow weaker every day
Bridge
Bright streets,
Left warming in the sun
Turn Cold
Whenever evening comes
Pre-Chorus
I'm not the man
I thought I'd be
What a fool to think
I'd end up with my dreams
Chorus
Feel the moon as it
Pulls the tide
Hide the pain as it
Starts to Rise
Keep the waves on the
Inside
But I'm drowning
I'm Drowning
Street Light
Illuminate the way
I'm lost
And it grows darker...