Some thoughts....
I need/ed some time to my self,
a walk in the forest alone,
a stroll by a lake and I
Thought about all that we said
But what really happened
was mostly in my head.If you're sticking with "Thought about all that we said", you need to go with "needed" in the first line. Otherwise you're operating in both the present and the past at the same time. If you use "need", you're implying you need the time to yourself but you haven't gotten it yet. While "thought about all that we said" means it already happened.
As the sun rises it fades/goes"Fades" sounds better to me. I note there's a "goes / grows" rhyme, but it feels like an accidental rhyme, as you don't seem to have any rhyme scheme going on, really, so I don't think that matters.
I hope that you to say that you're (still) feeling it tooI would leave out the "still", as you haven't actually established that she had a feeling that could be said to be still going on. She
may have...and you say you
felt like she had, but you haven't shown that she confirmed that feeling at all.
And, "I hope that you to say"
Something must be missing there. "I hope that you WANTED to say"?? "I hope that you TRIED to say"?? "I hope you INTENDED to say"??
(But) the longer I keep it inside,I think you need something there. If not "but", perhaps "Though" would work. Or "Still,". "Though" might be a problem as it causes two "th" words in a row, which sometimes isn't so nice for singing.
I've often/sometimes wonder how it plays outThis would either be "I've often wondered" or "I sometimes wonder". I prefer the second option; it has a cleaner sound to it.
My thoughts are like shadows
(that dance) in the (darkness of) nightI don't understand what you're going for here, so I have no recommendations.
(Cos) I just can't bare bear to see them aroundI usually figure: when in doubt, leave it out. So I'd probably drop the "Cos".
Miscellaneous thought--you have a kind of hit or miss, random rhyme scheme. In my opinion, it's better to have no rhyme scheme at all, because an inconsistent rhyme scheme gives me the impression that you
want to have a rhyme scheme but you're having too much trouble making it work.
Everything here, of course, is merely my opinions based on whatever is going on in my brain, so take from my thoughts what works for you (if anything) and ignore the rest.
Hope I've been at least a tiny bit helpful.
Vicki