Hi Gwyneth,
I've started mapping out a rough draft of the song. I'm having a little difficulty matching some of the words with the chords. If you don't mind I'd like to make a few alterations. I'll not alter the meaning but I'm having difficulty fitting all your words over the chord progression.
I hope you don't mind as I think its coming together nicely. It won't be heavy metal but it may well be weird (in a good sense).
diadem