[pacho]

Hello everyone, I did new song .. It is guitar ballad about sea.. And about woman.. I really like combinating think that get me exited
I did write when I saw perfect wavy hair of one woman. And they reminded me ocean..

https://soundcloud.com/patriciomusica/lwtwh

I feel something ,
when I see those waves
Its just like looking at A calm sea
 Now I wanna be a fisherman
 Fishing in that sea

 Can I touch those waves with my hands
 It feelS like they are in (the) flames
 And I desire to be
A Fisherman in that sea

I desire to be
 Someone who coul(l)d treat
 This whole ocean with his heartbeat
 To love, dedicate his faith

 Lady with the wavy hair
 I cant send you from my mind anywhere
 Cause youre waves are too massive
To escape THE laws of gravity

 Lady with the wavy hair
 And I cant go , cant go anywhere
I still see those perfect waves
Rounding into curved shapes

 How could you know already
 Im fascinated by THE sea and his powe
r When I see THE waves breaking
Im, paralysed, my hands are shaking

 The same happened here
 Suddenly I lost thoughts
When I saw you first time
 All in my head I suddently lost

CH: repeat

 And this is ending
This ballad about her,
 Lady with unique hair
 Which for now I lost


(Alternative ending I like more)

And this is ending
of this ballad about sea
how I meet this power
how I dont want to break free

[pompeyjazz]

Hi Pacho.  I think you have got some really good stuff going on here.  It's a good melody and your voice sounds very good. Personally I would get rid of the seagulls,  preferably with a shotgun and bring the sea noises down in the mix a bit. Also the title needs to be changed from "hear" to "hair" unless that's what you intended 

[pacho]

Hi Pacho.  I think you have got some really good stuff going on here.  It's a good melody and your voice sounds very good. Personally I would get rid of the seagulls,  preferably with a shotgun and bring the sea noises down in the mix a bit. Also the title needs to be changed from "hear" to "hair" unless that's what you intended 

Ahhh , thank you maan I didnt noticed it, thank you..  I wanted to add it to add atmosphere of my song .. but as I see it does more harm than good sometimes..

[pompeyjazz]

Yeah, I was thinking Dumbo you see

[rightly]

Nice poetic images.
Bit too much sound effects for me.
Overall sound is nice though, it's rare I hear this kind of song.
Somehow trippy for me.

[Katie Wilson]

Interesting song well done

[kevysc]

Nice song ( and I think the seagulls are good  ).

I am impressed with the 700 plays on Soundcloud, well done!

Kevin