Hello All,
A song I wrote about my Son at a dark time in my life. 

https://www.bandlab.com/post/2bc04e0a-eb6b-ec11-94f6-a04a5e79a6b8

I think you're singing your lyric lines to quick, follow your intro and don't have your vocal singing with your lyrics have your lyrics singing with your vocal I haven't listen to it all sorry 

I hear ya , I have a young wife , I feel like I'm raising a teenager
Yeah economy sucks .
Well I humor my self all day , talk to myself in stores , I don't give a fuck what people think of me
Do you think this baking soda that cleans dog spots is the same as regular baking soda to strangers ?
Well your in England , I guess that asshole Trump might win again , I don't know its not real great here now , Lets put him back in , I don't watch the news anyways . Ya got be careful in Calif with biz , everybodys a liberal , Oh yeah Biden is great , lie
Well I wish I could do all the parts like Prince , But i out lived him , So lets look on the bright side

Last night about 10pm I heard a growl and big splash , what the hell was that ? It had to be a Lake Otter
My wife was drunk on wine and singing Taylor swift songs , she's no help .

As I cast my line this morning and a snow white duck is staring at me

This song was written with Sandy Ramous , hits with Dixie Chicks Faith Hill ect ect
I had most of it , she helped dial it in
I play guitar melodies on a ton of solo writes . But always hire session players to make them sound more professional.
Where I'm at today , cut a few old songs like this
Buy Rick Beato theory tapes and see what's up that I can improve on , On guitar melodies , Structures and all that jazz , He's got all this nailed .
I might hire Brent Baxter again to write , "Somewhere South Of A Memory " I don't want to come off as old with a CT scan coming up . nobody wants to hear me crying in my beer

This is how this worked on this song . I'm sick of pitching songs . So I got the tracks and added a harp player
Sang it had BZ Lewis mix it .All my songs are collaborative Nick. I like the interaction with session players and a producer.